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Published by threeleafshamrock on June 30, 2009 - 12:21
from the ABC set Lurve Ramblings

Clothed in good manners;

dressed for the winds of rejection

but ready to disrobe,

should the grey ambiguous atmosphere

be broken by pearly beams,

suggesting stormy heat,

moist sheets

and dam breaking floods

coming

before morning.

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Comments

whiskey | June 30, 2009 - 12:58

This is deceptively simple, and I love it!

threeleafshamrock | June 30, 2009 - 13:40

Thanks whiskey, glad you liked. Just read your latest story; brilliant! Thanks for reading ;)

MistakenMagic | June 30, 2009 - 16:55

Different from your usual style, Chris but this is by no means a bad thing! I like the effect of the separate lines. There is a lot of restraint in this poem which leaves the reader begging for more details ;)

Magic xxx

threeleafshamrock | June 30, 2009 - 18:47

Thanks Magic, chuffed with another unexpected cherry. I left a gap in the lines so that you could read between them ;) ;) Thanks for reading.

sarah wilson | June 30, 2009 - 20:15

Ah! really great poem. I love the idea of reading between the lines. Well deserved cherry:)

threeleafshamrock | June 30, 2009 - 21:12

Thanks lovely Sarah, appreciate it ;)

Nathan Bednarek | July 1, 2009 - 17:10

Love it! A well deserved cherry! ;-)

Nathan.

threeleafshamrock | July 1, 2009 - 18:16

Thanks Nathan ;)