Hungover

By the unfolding head

Sun, 30 Oct 2011

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10 comments

Sunday turns itself slowly
around my neck
unscrewing all the elements
of guilt
I have within
floating
like the fragments of egg
in a pan full of oily water
waiting in my sink

Last night replays again
and
again

Two pigeons take their positions
upon the cold concrete ledge
where they always like to meet
and make love

Balanced in awkward unison
just outside my window
they remind me
how
disgusting life can be

I recall her tears
and draw on my smoke

Certificate U

Autobiography

Comments

Sunday turns itself

Permalink Submitted by insertponceyfre... on Sun, 2011-10-30 18:07

Sunday turns itself slowly around my neck wonderful opening. well done

Thank you Insert. Kind of

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Mon, 2011-10-31 18:45

Thank you Insert. Kind of you to say so. The opening words for this one just came all at once in a rush and seemed to fit what I wanted to say, sort of captured the way my body felt physically.

ddf

Strong at both ends. Very

Permalink Submitted by leroy mockbee on Sun, 2011-10-30 18:32

Strong at both ends. Very well done.

Thank you kirincnj, I really

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Mon, 2011-10-31 18:45

Thank you kirincnj, I really appreciate your comment.

ddf

'Two pigeons take their

Permalink Submitted by Mark Anthony Pearce on Sun, 2011-10-30 20:53

'Two pigeons take their positions upon the cold concrete ledge where they always like to meet and make love Balanced in awkward unison just outside my window they remind me how disgusting life can be' Brilliant writing Danny. Hits home somehow. MARK

Thanks Mark, I'm glad you

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Mon, 2011-10-31 18:48

Thanks Mark, I'm glad you enjoyed this one, very kind comments. Bloody pigeons. I tell you, all day they're at it on this one particular ledge. The view doesn't go down well over breakfast.

ddf

Thanks blighters. How grim.

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Mon, 2011-10-31 18:50

Thanks blighters. How grim. I do somehow take pride in the fact my writing brought this back for you though. Comment much appreciated!

ddf

As the Duke often says, this

Permalink Submitted by fatboy74 on Sun, 2011-10-30 22:46

As the Duke often says, this is a real Bobbydazzler. :-)

thank you fatboy, really

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Mon, 2011-10-31 18:57

thank you fatboy, really appreciate the feedback, kind of you to say.

ddf

thank you Sundays, that's a

Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on Sat, 2011-11-05 19:03

thank you Sundays, that's a really nice thing to say. I appreciate it.

ddf