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Morning Glow

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Published by White Dwarf on February 20, 2011 - 02:19
from the ABC set Poetry

I could so easily fall in,
Be carried by the undertow;
Toes curling in the sand,
Breakwater and morning glow.

We could fear the promise of storms,
Or enjoy the sun while it’s high,
Dance with the shifting sands,
With one eye upon the sky.

If the clouds begin to fall,
And the seas begin to turn,
We would have had this time, and
the lessons that we’ve learned.

The sun will slip below the line,
And we will watch it slowly go,
Tomorrow becomes today again,
Break water and morning glow.

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Comments

RachelPatricia | February 20, 2011 - 03:15

This is beautiful, White Dwarf :)

I attempted to copy and paste my favourite lines but there are far too many, every stanza as equally stunning as the next, which to me is the true hallmark of a fantastic poem.

Simply love this, so good to be reading more of your work after your absence! Looking forward to more :)

Rachel xx

White Dwarf | February 20, 2011 - 03:20

thank you Pen

I am not a confident poet.. but this was inspired .. so maybe thats why I liked it enough to post.

Thanks for the welcome back

xx

SundaysChild | February 20, 2011 - 04:38

Much enjoyed, White Dwarf- welcome back :)

seashore | February 20, 2011 - 10:04

I think most of us would admit to not being confident about our writing, WD - but this is a truly lovely piece and one to be proud of.

shoe | February 20, 2011 - 11:28

Has a lovely quietness to it, I'm pleased you posted it.

White Dwarf | February 20, 2011 - 11:36

Thank you all ... I'm so pleased.

fatboy74 | February 20, 2011 - 12:25

Delicate and beautiful - really enjoyed this and look forward to more. :-)

Beeme | February 20, 2011 - 13:26

I really enjoyed, intricate and very beautiful imagery.

Beeme xx

Silver Spun Sand | February 20, 2011 - 13:50

A skilfully written poem I really enjoyed, White Dwarf. Some more, please;-)

Tina

White Dwarf | February 20, 2011 - 15:13

quietness is a great way to describe it. Thank you.

Thanks everybody.. I feel the love.

You always make me want to improve and keep writing.

BeKsta | March 27, 2011 - 10:20

I agree. Beautiful work you!

sue dinum | July 13, 2012 - 18:52

Hello WD, popped over as promised. Fantastic poem, absolutely seamless. Read so smoothly and appeared to rhyme without rhyming, uncanny, a tribute to your skill with words. Much enjoyed.

Trev.

White Dwarf | July 13, 2012 - 20:23

Thank you, Trev.

I liked this one enough to post it. I wrote it for my fiancée. Poetry isn't really my bag. Usually it is just something to write when I don't know what to write.

Thanks for stopping by.

Denzella | July 20, 2012 - 07:31

Yes, White Dwarf,

I think this is a beautiful piece of writing. I so enjoyed reading it. I am not a poet but it seemed to me to be so symmetrical but not in a contrived way at all.

Loved it

Moya

White Dwarf | July 20, 2012 - 07:52

Thanks Moya, very kind.

It is about time I wrote another poem for my loving lady.

Maybe I can post a draft and I can get some help.