Their was a gun shot, it narrowly missed.
It ran across the sun shinning, glistening, beach and eventually dropped to the sandy land.
Another gun shot, it fell deep into the depths of hell.
Blood dripped into the yellow sand
Before you knew it;the whole area (a meter in length) filled with rich red blood coated sand....
A taster of Bennett Donohoe
Published by The Writer on March 17, 2012 - 15:31
from the ABC set Detective Bennett Donohoe and other stories
from the ABC set Detective Bennett Donohoe and other stories
Comments
Luly Whisper | April 27, 2012 - 20:32
A vivid piece of writing.
I suggest, though, that you get someone to check your spelling and grammar. For instance, the plural of "story" is "stories."
Keep writing.
The Writer | April 28, 2012 - 19:51
I have to admit I'm rubbish at spelling