Beloved by narcissa

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Mon, 2006-06-05 15:43

Beloved by narcissa

This came back round in the re-edited pile. I don't recall it from first time around but it clearly didn't get a cherry then. It certainly deserves one now.

I love the sparse language, the image of the cold room and the marbled shoulder blades.

Terrific:

http://www.abctales.com/story/narcissa/beloved

Tue, 2006-06-06 13:25

littleditty

i hadn't seen this one - glad i did - Narcissa (hello here!) - fine and complete. i simply liked it very much. No suggestions from littleditty x

Tue, 2006-06-06 16:27

Juliet OC

blue warmth is a great image hinting of naked bodies and sensuality. Juliet

Juliet

Thu, 2006-06-08 13:42

narcissa

Thanks to all of you for such lovely comments - I did a lot of rearranging with line-breaks and I'm much happier with it as a piece now! I wasn't expecting a cherry, so that was a lovely surprise :) Thanks again! narcissa x

Fri, 2006-06-09 19:38

neilmc

"I practise standing in all the places I remember seeing you " Lovely, lovely. I like how the setting is of cold and solitude yet the poem somehow radiates a lot of positiveness and warmth.

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