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There is a rich seam of melancholy gold running through this lovely sleazy, seedy poem. Liquor and strippers at midday emphasize the sense of a better life happening elsewhere in your 'songs/ and fields of tulips'. The last stanza made me want to pack a bag , hail a transatlantic flight and come to find this greyhound America on one block east.

A couple of notes:
I had trouble deciphering lines 3 & 4 of the first stanza. How are 'nipples tassel-tight' around the neck of a bottle? I may be misreading the sense owing to the lack of punctuation.
Was there a reason you made 'dime' singular and 'dollars' plural?

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