RE:Deathrow
Thu, 2010-07-08 18:53
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RE:Deathrow
i am curious what readers whomever they maybe, think of this epic revenge odyssey so i would like to hear what ever comments they have, good or bad.
Nolan
"Nothing is good or bad but thinking makes it so...
Novel genius
sweet thanks i dont beleive i am in anyway cut out for writing and secondly im just using this site to get the story out of my head and rewrite it in areas theat need work give me some pointers.
Highhat
No- bad and I am not thinking
Novel genius
thanks for the negative comment what made you thinlk it was bad any ways i tyried im only seventeen
Highhat
So sorry Novel genius. I didn't mean your piece at all. So sorry I must say. I didn't see the link to your epic but confused it with a general question? My fault. I really do apologize. Can you forgive me? I will read it soon. I am sure it is just a good piece all together.;)
Pia
Novel genius
yeah i can i wasn't upset at all though but mistakes happen trust me im pretty sure my story has plenty and i did mistake your comment for a negative one sorry for that
Highhat
Because I can't take too much in at a time I say I have read a little of your set "Deathrow" and I certainly do like it. Though. . and there is a but It really needs proof reading. It has a lot of potential but you really need to tidy up a bit- a large bit. You need commas, quotation marks, fullstops, paragraphs and your spelling really needs a make over. When this is done and you have editted I would love to read them again.
Just my humble opinion. A feedback I hope you can use. Have a look at it and consider.
kind regards
Pia
Novel genius
okay you know something you are the third person to have said that and yes i should proof read its a fact not an opinion so don't worry thanks for saying its got potential though.
Novel genius
thanks for saying its got potential and your not the only one saying i need to work on the punctuation marks its a fact that they need work but i am no good at such self editing
Novel genius
dang it wrote same thing twice sorry
Highhat
I'm sure you can get some assistance ;)xx pia
Novel genius
yeah i know gotta find some one
chuck
All you need to do is read some good writers. Dickens, Kipling, James, Maugham, Greene, Burgess would be a good place to start. Or try Barth, Beckett, Miller, Burroughs, Nabokov, Bukowski etc. if you like something more experimental. If you think bad grammar and sloppy punctuation are cool then you're in uncharted waters.
Highhat
Chuck- "unchartered"- it IS difficult!!
chuck
I'll stick with uncharted....as in unmapped.
Great example of unpunctuated writing BTW is Molly's soliloquy at the end of 'Ulysses'.
Highhat
I just looked it up and hoped you hadn't looked yet so I could come with a correction of myself. You are quite right- uncharted. Big mistake. mine of course. Comes by wanting to be perfect. Lol;)unexplored perfection. . nice twang to it methinks-unchartered indeed- sorry :d
Highhat
Ulysses? You only have to read the ending , right? Sorry- so illiterate!
chuck
No need to apologize....reading Ulysses is more of a vocation than a pleasure.
Novel genius
hmmm i will try it but for now you guys will just have to suffer reading a good story with bad grammer i apoligize im no godd at actually writting a novel or anything in fact im more of an artist type of guy
Highhat
At least you got it with the Greek and Egyptian gods ;)
Novel genius
yeah i was aiming for that and more for the fights tha will take place these were the bases of the story