Brutal honesty

Police your brutality :-) (please!) Thanks folks.

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Thank you all for responding to my mayday. It seemed a somewhat cheeky and selfish request. Your comments have been very valuable and I will consider them all very carefully and look at how I can change this and future pieces in light of them. It would be great to contribute to more of these for other writers who want it. I try to look at as much of other people's posts on here as possible, but if I don't get on-line for a week, I only look at the previous couple of days' posts. We are all busy in some way. When I do read poems and stories I often feel that I hold back on giving a rounded opinion for two reasons: 1) I am not worthy...; 2) I don't know to what extent a poster actually wants to hear constructive but negative criticism. That's why I asked for it - prepared for what might come my way. But I felt I wasn't going to develop this without some correction from ABC friends, and ultimately trusted in everyone. It would be great to open this forum up to share good constructive criticism. We are lousy critics of our own work. As sue dinum said, the limitation is the sheer volume of posts vs. the number of people who have time to read it all and then comment. Thank you all anyway, generous critics and silent readers alike.