Maxwell vs Machines - Lucas Brown

This is absolutley fantastic. Funny, fresh, original...from the end of the first paragraph I was hooked. The whole thing is wonderfully imaginative and brilliantly excecuted.

Just thought I'd point out a couple of things I noticed: 3rd paragraph, 3rd line, 'again' should be 'against', I think. And also, Starbucks is one word. Also this line:

'I'll hit you, damn it.' He threatened

Should be:

'I'll hit you, damn it,' he threatened.

God, I'm pedantic.

But the thing is, this is so good it deserves to be perfect. Honestly the best short story I've read here in a while.

Well done!

Ben