The bench: Fergal

Thanks span, I like the second half a lot - I think the first part is very cliched, and I couldn't work out if that made the second bit work better. Hmmm. Still don't know either. But thanks for flag. And I really liked the idea of uprooting the bench.

I like it very much. Some cracking lines in there and a sweet narrative. Alternate title suggestion: "Love Instead of Cheese". :D Perhaps a couple of the line breaks weaken the phrasing (the ones ending on "the" in particular) but that's my only grumble. b x

i liked this very much the first time round - it reads even better now, i think the first half works as a cliche because life is a bit like that when we are young and our lives are ahead of us - i don't find the writing in itself cliched btw, then the second half - grown-up reality conveys the mood of looking back with nostalgia - when life was oh so simple. In terms of structure, i do not have the skill to comment but it reads out well to me. Juliet

Good narrative. Nice little poetical story (proetry/pose)... The surreality of the 2nd half makes the whole thing feel like a dream... like the narrator isn't just remembering, but, in a dream-state, re-living the time... Splendid! ~PEPS~ “You do not truly know someone until you fight them.”