The Bench by Fergal
Thu, 2006-06-15 20:04
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The Bench by Fergal
http://www.abctales.com/story/fergal/the-bench
i completely connected with this, and as a teacher of 6th form who spend hours discussing the prom and getting their hair done and finding ball gowns in TK maxx, it, i am sure, will ring true with so many. I really cannot find anything i would crit, and every line was my favourite, to pick out any one or two would take it out of context and it is the scene that is created that makes it so real. But the lines about the tie and the silly bridesmaid curls had me smiling in recognition.
The sombre more grown up ending is sad in that youthful dreams and hopes are rarely the reality of life, but the last verse kicks against that cliche. If you want any help with that bench, give me a shout.
Juliet
mykle
Yes, I liked it too - but I'm always put off by this fad for breaking off the end of sentences. It seemed to work at the start of the piece but it just seemed pointless later on - I suppose I ought to keep up with the fashions...
Still, worth a posy :O)
martin_t
loved this, all the hope and dreams we have at our graduation, and always wanting to go back to those times when anything was possible
fergal
Ah thanks. Glad you liked it. Don't think it is quite there yet... some of the breaks don't work, and it is not quite right. But I like the idea of uprooting the bench. I wonder if the gesture itself would have the desired effect.
Anyway, cheers for the flag.