an apparition of spring by richhanson

http://www.abctales.com/story/richhanson/an-apparition-of-spring-0

i so wanted this to end differently, but life's not like that i suppose. Even when you want to change you can't.

I think this could do with some more work, in the middle it seems to pull me out of the mood, particularly when he is talking about his job - i felt told not shown, but it pulls you back in when he contemplates the graduation. Maybe the middle needs cutting down a bit - i don't think the history is necessary it is obvious how different he and Sarah are from the very first para re: having to answer emails as soon as they arrive. I'd rather you didn't spell this out but allowed me to infer why the relationship broke down.

What do others think?

Juliet