The Tinted Window, by ME!
http://www.abctales.com/story/ggggareth/tinted-window
I don't usually post first drafts on here, but this is one. I just can't decide whether it's any good and I'd appreciate your feedback.
A little background to help:
This started out as an updated version of MR James' "The Mezotint"; but instead of having a photograph changing regularly (where a monstrous figure gets closer to the onlooker), this story uses a web cam updating intermittently.
But the characters took over this story early on, and I wonder whether the back story swamps the terror of the central theme...?
Anyway, thanks in advance!
Gareth
PS, apologies for the length (3,600 words). Possibly, this is one of the story's faults(?)