The Mask In The Mirror

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Tue, 2006-04-18 00:19

Sandy Lancaster

The Mask In The Mirror

I would appreciate feedback from anyone who has read this. Thank you for your time.

http://www.abctales.com/story/sandy-lancaster/the-mask-in-the-mirror

Tue, 2006-04-18 16:54

QueenElf

I have to be honest, I gave up half-way through. It wasn't that there was anything wrong with the story, it intregued me, but the lack of gaps in between was making my eyes ache. Try using some paragrah breaks and also tell people it's a long story, so we can read it knowing that we have to take our time over it.

Lfuller

Tue, 2006-04-18 20:48

Sandy Lancaster

QueenElf - sorry about making your eyes ache! Thanks for pointing out the lack of paragraph breaks to me. I have fixed that and hopefully it's a little easier to read. Thanks again!

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