Amonocourseys store by sandy lancaster
Tue, 2006-04-18 10:47
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Amonocourseys store by sandy lancaster
http://www.abctales.com/story/sandy-lancaster/amoncourseys-store
There's been a lot of trips down memory lane on here recently, and this piece took me by the hand and led me to a place and time which I never knew before but now feels so familiar. An effortless read, a well-crafted snapshot of another time and place, with wonderful well-observed details like the gym shoes and the two Normans.
It flagged a bit for me in the store scene- I felt overwhelmed by too much detailed description - but that's just my opinion and overall I thought this was a great piece of writing.
Josie - thanks for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed it for the most part. I agree that there is too much description in the store. This started out to be a piece about the store itself (as an assignment) and it grew from there - so in the beginning deleting the description about the store was necessary. However, I am now considering removing a bit of the description. Thanks for your help!!