Pawn Shop

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Tue, 2006-05-30 01:49

Pawn Shop

http://www.abctales.com/story/mikepyro/pawn-shop-0

this is, of course, my own work. It's another attempt at a comedy sketch and I was wondering if anyone found it enjoyable. It's not laugh out loud funny but it should bring a smile to some faces. Any kind of comment is fine, critisism welcomed. Thanks. :D

Tue, 2006-05-30 10:36

Juliet OC

there are some lovely funny moments in this - particularly concerning the door. I did lose my way a little in the middle with the who pulled a gun on who and i think you could have made more of him being shot. What were the other customers doing while this happened? I think there is room to work on the middle, i didn't really get much of sense of the shop. but yes it did make me smile. Juliet

Juliet

Wed, 2006-05-31 02:32

Tasha-Rae

This was funny, and when I was in a bad mood, it lifted my spirits!!! Mikepyro you are amazing! I love you to death!!! "What are you doing with a toaster?" "Its for mom..." that was my favorite part.... your so cool mikepyro!

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