Sensing by camus

I agree most writing like this is awful; this is really good. It has a great atmosphere about it. On thing: First line should be 'breathe', I think. Ben

Hurrah...my very first cherry, thanks my grin is now 6 feet wide (and on my daughters birthday too) Liana is right, I have been working pretty hard at trying to write poetry and the ones on here are my first ever, I also seem to remember some very clever person telling me that the best poems come naturally, it seems she was right...this one was written in about 15 minutes! *big grin to clever friend (msn still buggered)* Oh, and you are right Ben there should be an 'E', at last a genuine use for the edit button. Thanks again A.

this one is excellent too! Great Writting. "hidden" http://www.abctales.com/node/543436 Soraia

Haha..thanks Soraia, this one has been flagged before (and deleted by Nikaya/Jasper) Hidden is actually one that I am thinking about reworking as I am not too happy with the second verse. I am quite amused at how poems appeal differently to people, from the poetry that I have written so far neither of the 2 mentioned on here are my favourite (not even with a cherry), as I feel that 'Blinded by Distance' is my best one, but perhaps that is because it was my first and I have sentimental feelings for it! Anyway, thanks again A. P.s...congrats on your cherries and keep posting those poems as I, and I'm sure many others, am thoroughly enjoying your work.

I like that one too, although not the last sentence. Sorry. Funnly enough I was going to start a new forum topic with "Hidden", but that sort of didn't work and i then realised there was one already here for you! Thanks for the encouragement and i'm enjoying your work too. Soraia xx