you painted a vivid scene and there was real movement in the piece and it made me want to read on. I really felt that you took on board the comments about your work being (at times) sedentary. Now you just need to make sure you keep up the pace.
Juliet
Alas, Bubbles
I just read this poem thank you I enjoyed it very much I actually cracked a smile and shed a tear on what was prior to reading this a really bad day.
I don't know how to start a new post in order to post a comment so i just looked for one with the author's name and tagged on there.
Thanks for the comment!
To make a post, btw, you either go to "Post new Forum Topic" which is out on the list before this, or, for a story, go to the collection in question.
Aha! For the last few weeks I've been trying to work out how to add a comment to the story itself...I was determined to get my computer illiterate brain to work it out, but had just decided I needed to ask for help. Now I know!
Thanks for that!
M
Juliet