SWEET MEMORIES

By Cavalcader

Thu, 26 Jan 2012
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15 comments
 

Ben is in the garden
hard of hearing
weeding and pruning
the sun is going down

He had already cut
the hollyhocks
passion flowers
with a pair of shears

'Winnie his wife
shouts out!
"your memory swings like
a pendulum clock"

backwards and foreward
sometimes a bit bloody slow"
Ben thought he heard her say
"bring in the parrots"

but Winnie asked for carrots
"come in for your shower”
he went in carrying
sweet peas and all kinds of flowers

little Polly ran into her wendy house
"mummy! Mummy!
hear comes uncle Tom
please! can he stay for tea?

tell me
stories and tales
of down by the river
how the fishing line
caught in his hair.

Sing me a song.
"one, two, three four five,
once he caught a fish alive,
six, seven, eight nine ten
then he let it go again

why? did you let him go
because he bit my finger so
which finger did he bite
my little finger on the right"

"we will see" mummy replied
"come and get ready”
Ben is in the shower,
brushes his moustache,

changes into fresh clothes,
enters the room
forgetting he has asked ‘Molly
proper looking dolly

Ben holding in his hand a rose
her eye’s are sparkling like a star
he starts calling her a floozie
a second-hand rose

Molly has parked her pink
cadillac car with
large false eyelashes
over the headlights

everyone is sitting at the table
Polly’s dad Harry
works as a mechanic
at the garage

who should peer around the door
but the vicar ‘Gabriel’
in his white collar and flowing robe
wearing shiny black shoes

he seats himself with the family
and grabs the only prawn sandwich
smiles to himself as he slips
an edible rice paper prayer list into it

Polly the little girl
with golden curls
stuck her tongue
out to the vicar

Grace begins
lettuce us be trooly thankful
for the big sleep,
thank you Lord for everything,

Amen, and bless you all
"ooh! I’ve been
at the red wine again."
hiccups

all comments please
coloured lines keep coming up
on words,of computer underlinings, have to change it most dificult for it to flow?
'Polly' has remembered the rest of song! now.
not who it is written by!

Certificate U
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Very much enjoyed, Julie;-) The best of luck with it in the competition. Tina x

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver Spun Sand Tina,Thankyou so much,for lovely comment. I hope you WIN IT. Mine was jumbled here and here! And it underlines in all colours like weeding at and so on? Confusing. which throws me off,as when I finish and submit,thank goodness comes out ok. "Speech marks alter spacing of line! Also think where should speech marks go. Over 300 words,is that too long! So strange I think! or start writing find object or topic next morning in the paper? No haven't sent. Even somethink in poem. I only really do for fun! See reaction. Very cold wind out we had come back,eat local. Have a good day. Thanks. Any ideas be greatful. Tina,you had a beautiful cat,maybe you can help! As the one I mention outside again,calling me,been raining,had such a good time two day's running,mine was eating,and dor ajar,in Ray said,no! one he was eating. But the cat never does anything! 2 rained be on his bed wet,not true! Got his jumper lay on. Cat in,pushed his head and paw! had to get door closed out him being caught! Went bedroom one sound doesn't like Ray does and he will go! I felt terrible,over it,so got spare blanket or get shower cover maybe,cos I will always have him in co; and massage loves. Any ideas please! j x

Submitted by gerardineanne on
You paint a bright picture. Liked especially the parrots/carrots and' once I caught a fish alive.' Good luck with the competition.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New gerardineanne Hello! Just fun,scribble, then change words fit in and make more exciting. Well his hearing, in poem is going! Plus I have h/aid times people say,I thought you said...p b or I don't receive 100% can be a bit of fun! Thankyou so much reading! Must read your's. julie x good luck if in comp; we just got in.

Submitted by Nolan on
I love your poem dear! So honest. Our own Reverend Stain was pulled off at a roadblock New Year's Eve the policeman stuck his head into the window “Have you been drinking sir? “No! “And that bottle? “It's water “Open it please “By Jove! He's done it again!
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Nolan Thanks for the comments. My pop alway's told me rights and wrongs. Who one can trust as a child,I would have asked but your can trust....no of course you can't? I enjoyed your comment that does happen! Now finished end of of the children's song! just remembered. all the best. cavalcaderl julie x

Submitted by TVR on
I thought this was so sweet, Julie. You kept the words flowing really well. Lots of little scene gems here, I enjoyed the whole thing very much. Sweet Memories indeed! Best wishes. sue

TVR

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Sue Dinum hello! Thanks for commenting. The damn computer kept underlings words,I put so had think! quick what could use. Now remembered end of song,dont know the writer should have put think! So glad you found something in the poem? Good luck in the competiton, and all. cavalcaderl julie x

Submitted by oldpesky on
Good to see you having another go at the competition, julie. This part... 'tell me stories and tales of down by the river how the fishing line caught in his hair.' ...reminded me of when I was a young whippersnapper and my arm got caught on a hook when a friend was casting. Yes, I was greeting like a big jessie. Hope you're having a lovely relaxing day.

Submitted by Nolan on
Hi Julie! I'm wondering now, might it not be possible to write an infinite letter? You could use induction or recursion and throw in some random elements so it doesn't get too boring. It can be done it's not hard even. All the best & Nolan
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Hello! Oldpesky Kev: Thankyou, so much for commenting. Glad you got come memories back from poem, Not good! Owing to underlining colour's come on,from our computer,makes me feel wrong words,so start delete and try another or carry on! Well I didn't go fishing, boy's did,more fly catching! But once bag opf live eels I think.ugh! I thought poem was grinding a bit,but he is deafish,like my hearing aid! Made it up more for fun! Been watching ice skating! So pleased cat came back,after dispute wih Ray cos rainso laid down my cardigan on his bed? All is ok! I'll always have him in,company and love amazing? Hope all is well for you,could be snow! Well not the winning side,it is fun to try! Needs working on. This computer if good day type quick,in middle words it will go into capitals. Awful to delete word and put right? Thanks. Are you doing a novel? Have a good week-end. julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
Nolan Thanks kind words and ideas, on poem comment. But I am looking up meanings of the words,checking! Don't think clever enough,do that yet! Do you mean a story,and put more in exciting. I hope it wasn't boring,some parts true! Just flows from the mind? Pop's garden,allottment maybe,things in life! I will look at what! you have mentioned. Thanks. Just watched ice skating? julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Editor t.cook Hi! (Tony) Do you think this poem,should be altered into a letter? As someone remarked in comment, so it doesn't get boring? And other words, infinite,induction,recursion! what do they mean exactly! I look it up in dictionary. I have worked hard taking out words said, and, says, or it underlined here. I did feel it was quite interesting,but maybe too long. comp entry but it was fun context of it. "Sweet Memories" time is running short now. They mention not very hard even to do! How do they know! All advice be greatful. Thanks. cavalcaderl julie x

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Cavalcader, Julie, I like it as it is. It lives up to its title...the memories are sweet and you create heart warming images. I particularly liked the image in the line "your memory is like a pendulum clock" but if it were my poem I would change "is like" to swings like. But hey, Julie, I'm no poet! Really enjoyed reading it and good luck with the competition. Moya
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Denzella Hello! Moya, Thanks for lovely comment. And help,I am a very slow learner. Most of it was perfectly true Will do as you commented,sounds better! No I am not poet or storyteller,you are so good at your's. Good luck for the competition. Just enter for fun! I do like replies,see how poet's and all receive it. Can't do punctuation either too much! One person likes I get a thrill,or they read one,way back some do! Love the way you tell your stories. Truly feel much like "Miranda Hart" do you think you are a bit,fun in the story! Mean in a nice way. On tv."Midwive's believe it won! award. cavalcaderl julie x PS The damn computer would not accept the changes! you kindly suggested,as getting end of the competition maybe, now I see it has? computer is going so slow!! Not sure if speech marks should have continued. Confuses me all,so have left out some times. Thanks so much for your kind help,went to alter like you mention,it didn't alter now it has. Years back I wouldn't been able to do this long! anway it's learning new things! all can say! cavalcaderl julie x