Untouchable

This is so beautiful Magic, I adore the space imagery! I love science so this was a hit for me.
The last lines are great. I think this is one of my favourite poem of yours, one of your best in my humble opinion. :-)

I love these lines;
"you were my sun."
"(This symmetry is art!)"
"And so you kept your distance -
flung me into orbit."

Beeme xx

Awwww thank you Beeme :) Science was never a passion of mine - but it was great fun to combine it with poetry! Glad you love those lines and I think this is also a personal favourite ;)

Magic xxx

A very sweet poem. The imagery here is very original to the subject. A big well done from me.

Nathan xox

Thank you Nathan! Glad the 'science imagery' gets a thumbs up from you too ;)

Magic xxx

Well, I'm certainly with Beeme on this one, Magic, certainly a 'fave' as far as I'm concerned; a difficult decision, because with you poetry one is always spoilt for choice;-)

"The way a planet
never sways,
never brushes its star."

For me, these are the lines that epitomise this excellent poem.

Tina xxx

Thank you Tina! I love those lines too - thanks so much for your help on this one ;)

Magic xxx

very beautiful, and for me an underlying sadness, but still made me smile,:~}

Glad this one made you smile Shoe! I think you're right that there is an underlying sadness - although the narrator ignores it because she's in love ;)

Magic xxx

excellent bit of poetry, magic. powerful and complete even in it's shortness.

jason

Thank you Jason ;) I'm currently reading an anthology of '101 very short poems' - and I have to say sometimes it's the shorter poem that do seem to have more impact!

Magic xxx

My favorite lines, I share with Tina. Just brilliant! It doesn't get much better than this, as far as I'm concerned and your right, when you say that shorts have more impact; they do but they need to be done well, as this most certainly is...class!

Chris ;) XXXX

Thank you, Chris! I have to say this poem is fast becoming a personal favourite ;) Cheers for reading!

Magic xxx

This is beautiful.
Delicious infective gravity!!
What a thought!
Simply superb.

Aww thank you Vidit ;) Glad you love those last few words as the poem grew from the ending!

Magic xxx

new mistakenMagic
very clever I like the Atoms and gravity
pieces very technical is that the word.
poem great.
julie x

Thank you Julie ;) Science has never been my subject but it seems to go quite well with poetry!

Magic xxx

You have such a way with words; they seem to come so effortlessly to you. I have to practically pull my hair out to achieve a pale immitation of your talent - you make me jealous!
keep up the good work; its a joy to read.
;)

Thank you SO much darkenwolf! You are such a loyal reader and I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my work! But please don't belittle yourself - your work is fantastic. And I've had a lot of help and coaching from others to get where I am now ;)

Magic xxx

no matter how hard you blow on the tinder the spark has to be there in the first place before the fire will take.
;)

thought I'd back track through your work on this rainy Wednesday and I love that I've discovered this golden oldy. I particularly liked the ending: "as I feast on your delicious, infective gravity". The beginning made me think as well, the idea that a touch is just a physical movement but the mind adds weight to it.

Thanks, Maggy! Wow, this is a golden oldy isn't it? Thanks for bringing me back to it :)

Magic xxx