Slowly Floating In the Wind

Hi Prettyrose,

this is so beautifully written, it made me think of
my dad who died of cancer in 2004, it was the kind
of words he would have used, especially the last
stanza:-

Even though my carriage awaits,
To take me through those heavenly Gates.
I wont go quietly and give in,
But fight this enemy from within.

Yes real fighting words.

Thanks for the read.

Jenny.

Hi Jenny, hope your ok and I am sorry to have woken any pain for you, I was trying to give inspiration, I wrote it with cancer in mind after i had a cancer scare couple years ago and i know some one in their 30's whos just been told she has breast cancer. But it can, i hope help many people with all kinds health issues.

Thank you for your kind words, means alot from some one so talented as yourself.

Take care
And
Keep Smiling :))

Hi prettyrose,

please don't be sorry, I think your poem was very
insperational and I'm glad I left a comment on here
now, because I'm sure it will give people a lot of
hope.

You certainly didn't wake up any pain for me, my
dad has been at rest along time now, I'm sure he
is in a much better place.

Cancer seems to be something we are afraid to talk
about, even now because it's so final, but I hope
that in the future the scientist will discover more
cures, so that less people have to suffer.

I hope that your cancer scare is well and truely
gone now and that your friend will be okay.

Thankyou for leaving your message.

Jenny.

Hi there Prettyrose,

The emotion i this piece is what gives it power and makes it a compelling read. It draws the reader in to empathise with the narrator and share the experience in all its terror. this it does very well.

I would make a very minor comment which you are free to ignore if you disagree, but in the last line of the first stanza you have

It felt like I had past by sell by date.

I think that there are a couple of typos here, so that I think it should read

It felt like I had passed my sell by date.

Many thanks for a moving poem.

all best wishes

Dave

Hi Jenny :) Thank you for saying that as I know from losing my own dad to ill health that sometimes the pain rears its bitter head when you least expect it.

I hope this poem does help and that any more I do (which I have got lined up) also do.

Your right we are afraid to mention Cancer, Now more so after figures show an increase but its probably just to painful for people to talk about it because on average at least 1 of us knows some one who have died or suffering with it, or a friend of a friend as it. But Like dementia I think it will take a few more years before we are all comfortable in our own skin to not only talk about it but face it straight on.

Yes Thank you so far we are both ok. :)

Takc Care
And
Keep Smiling.

T x

Hi Dave a.k.a Claireslover :)

Thank you for taking the time to write and pointing out something so obviously missed by me, but that serves me right for trying to submit poems/stories early hours of the morning or when I am not so awake lol. I have corrected it.

Thank you again for all of the comment.

take care and keep smiling.

new Prettyrose
Love the title.
Wonderful poem, I can identify
with all of this,some can, as indeed got carried
away posting the other day.Can't delete
said too much. Been there for all.
By there sides and mum nursing home,
not cancer. Big family happenings.
Quite a few Cancer and died.
My dad late fifties then life.
So call myself agony aunt.
Hope your well. Take care.
julie xx

a powerful piece. Well done.

Hi Cavalcaderl :) Thank you for lovely coment and yes the title just seemed perfect soon as it came to me.

Well it seems family and friends are lucky to have you and I know what you mean regarding nursing home, I too watched a relative suffer slowly in 1 of those places e.t.c.

Thank you again and Im not to bad and I appreciate you asking and I hope your ok too :))))

Take care

and Keep Smiling :))))))))

Hi Celticman :)

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.

Also for the comment it means alot :))))

Take care and Keep Smiling :)))))

Hi Prettyrose

Really loved your poem. A truly motivational piece. Keep it up :)

Hi Palvi Sharma, Thank you for taking the time to read it and for your lovely comments, they mean alot:)

take care and keep smiling :)))))