We lay there...
afterwards. She says
to turn the heating
up a notch...she’s cold,
I’m hot. The same
old story. Adds,
“By the way –
saved us fifty quid
today. ‘Buy one,
get one half price’;
the dresses are a dream!
Just what I need to boost
my summer wardrobe”.
There’s no arguing
with that kind of logic,
nor when she says,
“Thanks...ever so much.”
Kisses me – just where
I like it. Purrs, “You
spoil me. You shouldn’t,
you know,” and she’s right.
Yet for goodness sake –
only look at her! Her face
may not have launched
a thousand ships,
but it could – given
half a chance.
She slips out of bed
as silently as she got in...
like frost – feathering
the corrugated lid
of an old-fashioned
dustbin...
calls to me, says
she’s running a bath –
asks am I coming too,
and I ask myself
what choice
do I have?
Comments
jolono | June 23, 2012 - 18:21
Does it for me!
Rigel | June 23, 2012 - 18:22
Thank you jolono. I'm pleased to hear it.
jolono | June 23, 2012 - 18:22
Welcome by the way!
Rigel | June 23, 2012 - 19:35
How very kind;-) Thanks again.
Mark Heathcote | June 24, 2012 - 02:34
Love the last stanza very humorous… and congratulations on the cherry.
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 07:37
Thanks, Mark. Good that it made you smile.
skinner_jennifer | June 24, 2012 - 09:10
Hi Rigel,
can I first say, wonderful title. I think it
definitely summed up the poem wonderfully for me.
Great read. Oh and congrats on the cherries.
Jenny.
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 10:07
Hello there, Jennifer. Thank you for your kind words.
Rigel
lenchenelf | June 24, 2012 - 10:08
The fifth stanza stands out, speaks volumes,lovely.
all the best
Lena xx
the unfolding head | June 24, 2012 - 10:47
really like this one, crammed with honesty... love the ending.
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 11:43
Thanks, Lena. Very much obliged to you.
And all the best to you, too.
Rigel xx
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 11:43
You too have a way with words, the unfolding head. Thank you for them.
scratch | June 24, 2012 - 12:08
Excellent again Rigel. Congratulations on the pick too.
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 14:00
Good on you, scratch. Thanks.
sid | June 24, 2012 - 19:56
Really enjoyed this, Rigel. Theres a cynicism in it that appeals to me
Rigel | June 24, 2012 - 22:00
Kindred spirits, it seems. Many thanks, sid.
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hudsonmoon | June 25, 2012 - 20:10
Well done. good and steamy piece.
rich
Rigel | June 25, 2012 - 23:48
Thanks, Rich. Appreciated.
Rigel
Denzella | June 26, 2012 - 22:26
Hello Rigel,
This is another really good piece that works on the principle of less is more. Well done and congratulations on those well deserved cherries. Won't be long before you have an orchard.
Moya
Oh, and I love the way the stanzas lead into one another.
KizWiz | June 27, 2012 - 08:39
Nice cherry... Provocatively honest! Thanks, Rigel
:o) K.
Rigel | June 27, 2012 - 09:27
Cheers, Moya.
Rigel
Rigel | June 27, 2012 - 09:28
And thank you, KizWiz.
Rigel
MistakenMagic | June 27, 2012 - 13:12
"She slips out of bed
as silently as she got in...
like frost – feathering
the corrugated lid
of an old-fashioned
dustbin..."
- absolutely adore this stanza, Rigel. A superb poem. Well done on all the picks!
Magic xxx
Rigel | June 29, 2012 - 19:23
Hello again, Magic.
Kind of you to 'read me', and to leave a comment as delightful as your name.
Rigel xxx