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Breaking the Ice

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Published by Silver Spun Sand on January 26, 2010 - 20:43
from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Share a smoke, strolling home
from Camden Lock; watching lights
in bedrooms and lounges spring to life
in other people’s houses.

It is warmer tonight –
the thaw, slowly setting in. Not
much snow left, not here on the ground;
only slushy stuff.

Our bus beats us to the stop.
We run, full pelt; sit up top like a couple
of college-kids. Both, breathless...
can almost smell the melt.

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Comments

Beeme | January 26, 2010 - 21:49

I really enjoyed this, I especially enjoyed the second stanza. Beautiful imagery :-)

Beeme xx

Silver Spun Sand | January 26, 2010 - 22:35

Thanks so much, Beeme. You are shining as brightly as ever I see;-)

Tina xx

Dynamaso | January 27, 2010 - 11:35

Glad things are warming up over there. Good piece, too, by the way.

Silver Spun Sand | January 27, 2010 - 12:26

Hi there, Dynamaso;-) As for the great British weather, renownedly fickle...Yes, it is a touch warmer at present but I think they are a forecasting and 'Arctic blast' by the end of the week, so I think I'll get my sunbathing done today;-) Glad you enjoyed the 'pome' and thanks for telling me.

All the best.

Tina

Nathan Bednarek | January 27, 2010 - 15:40

I love the way you turned a seemingly 'unromantic' setting into something that truly expresses the relationship between two people. I hope you understand what I mean ;-)

In other words; you use the most unlikely images to describe a simple, yet powerful relationship.

And that is what made it so enjoyable for me. Well done.

Nathan xox

Silver Spun Sand | January 27, 2010 - 16:07

Thank you Nathan - glad you enjoyed, and as usual, you have captured the mood of the poem in a nutshell. I am so encouraged that it obviously worked well, at least for you.

Was just thinking about you as a matter of fact. Took a break and thought I'd have a look at good old ABC...and there you were;-)

Tina xox

shoe | January 27, 2010 - 16:27

works for me too!:~}

Silver Spun Sand | January 27, 2010 - 16:45

Thanks, Shirley. Cheers;-)

Tina

MistakenMagic | January 27, 2010 - 17:54

'smell the melt' love this phrasing, Tina! Very atmospheric poem - another great read ;)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | January 27, 2010 - 18:13

Thanks to you indeed, Magic. Let's just hope things don't all freeze up again;-)

Tina xxx