You didn’t kiss me goodbye this morning,
nor have you for a long time. Oh, I know
you’ve got a lot on. Meetings here, there
and everywhere. Funny...how we’ve changed
over the years; I can recall when we thought
the world would end when we weren’t
in each other’s line of sight.
It’s not only that, it’s the way you breeze out...
never once giving a thought to me, almost
as if you breathe a sigh of relief – soon
as you leave. Would it make any difference
if I held you, real close, said things in your ear
like I used to say. Would you still walk away
without even a sigh?
Maybe I’ll do that, or maybe, I’m too afraid
to try. Yesterday, I forgot to mention, I went
outside – hung the washing on the line. I
had a head full of thunder; those wind-chimes
you bought me that Christmas, echoing
in my ears. I felt a pressure on my back –
like someone taking shelter from the cold,
but it was only the wind. For a moment,
there, I’d thought it was you.
Comments
jolono | December 20, 2011 - 18:29
SSS, love this, its so poetic ( sorry for the pun), it reachers deep about a lost love that is still there but waiting to be brought to life again.
Good stuff.
Silver Spun Sand | December 20, 2011 - 18:43
Many thanks, jolono. I'm pleased it hit the spot with you;-)
Tina
Rhiannonw | December 20, 2011 - 18:58
You are always able at showing how how easily we can take each other for granted,and how quietly things can slide, Tina. And at rhythmic musings like this.
Silver Spun Sand | December 20, 2011 - 18:59
Your words are so encouraging, rhiannon, and I thank you for them.
Pleased you enjoyed, and I really do appreciate your telling me;-)
Tina
hoalarg1 | December 20, 2011 - 19:39
This poem has a lovely simplicity to it. Well done.
scratch | December 20, 2011 - 19:43
All of the above and the wind image at the end - tantalising.
albamac | December 20, 2011 - 19:51
"For a moment,
there, I’d thought it was you."
That made me ache, Tina. Straight to the heart.
Silver Spun Sand | December 20, 2011 - 20:01
I thank you, hoalarg...very much;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | December 20, 2011 - 20:02
I love that word, scratch, 'tantalising', and I'm more than pleased you found some of the imagery so.
Many thanks;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | December 20, 2011 - 20:05
Gosh, albamac, thank you for letting me know that found this poem more than worthwhile. I really do appreciate it;-)
skinner_jennifer | December 21, 2011 - 10:26
A poignant poem Tina, with a message of being careful
not to take your partner for granted. Sometimes we
all need that nudge now and again.
Thankyou for sharing.
Jenny.
Highhat | December 21, 2011 - 10:29
I have been there- not fun. You put all the feelings so well into a beautifully simple language Tina.
have a good Wednesday...here there's the first icing sugar sprinkled on the ground.. nice and peaceful
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | December 21, 2011 - 17:46
How right you are, Jenny. All of us, I think, without exception.
Many thanks for reading and I am pleased you found it worthwhile.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | December 21, 2011 - 17:49
Hey, Pia - I hope you enjoyed that first 'icing sugar' today, and you are right how peaceful it does seem to make things.
Thanks, so much for reading, and I am pleased it meant something to you;-)
Tina;-)
Denzella | December 21, 2011 - 20:06
Hello Tina,
A lovely wistful poem full of longing for a love that once was but now has moved on through thoughtless familiarity.
Very much enjoyed.
Moya
Silver Spun Sand | December 21, 2011 - 20:46
Thanks, Moya. Pleased you enjoyed, and I am more than grateful you took the trouble to tell me;-)
Tina
mycall | February 16, 2012 - 23:04
Really beautiful, like reading an honest letter, I felt guilty...:)Mike
Silver Spun Sand | February 17, 2012 - 08:22
Hey - thanks for reading this one, Mike. Pleased you enjoyed;-)
Tina