Ticket to Ride

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from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

We sat by the ocean that night,
and watched the tide go out...
Waves, crashing on the beach
then receding, again, and again;
and in its wake, detritus...driftwood...
one algae encrusted shoe; bottles,
plastic bags, battered Coke cans.
Couch grass rattled in the dunes

We missed the last train back,
and I fell asleep – head on your lap,
on a bench at the station, and yet
I don’t even remember your name...
not presently. It’s not you I yen for,
it’s those days I miss – days of
‘What the heck’, when we just knew,
without question, we’d always
make it home again.

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Comments

Linda Wigzell Cress | November 10, 2011 - 09:32

I did enjoy this. So atmospheric.

Silver Spun Sand | November 10, 2011 - 09:54

Linda, thank you so very much. Pleased you thought so;-)

Tina

seashore | November 10, 2011 - 10:00

What I could have done with all the detritus, Tina - creatively I mean - takes me back to Devon and living by the sea...

Also takes me back further too of course and I share your memories of youth...much enjoyed.

skinner_jennifer | November 10, 2011 - 11:29

Hi Tina,

What a wonderful poem of memories you conjure up
and that ending just made it for me. Reminds me
of not having a care in the world.

Thankyou for sharing.

Jenny.

Silver Spun Sand | November 10, 2011 - 12:39

Thanks for reading, Coral, and I'm glad it transported you back in time;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | November 10, 2011 - 12:39

Jenny - thank you. Yes, those certainly were the days;-)

Tina

Beeme | November 10, 2011 - 19:04

This is so lovely Tina, I really enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

Silver Spun Sand | November 10, 2011 - 20:15

Thanks Beeme, good of you to tell me;-)

Tina xx

fatboy74 | November 11, 2011 - 01:43

Yes this is really beautiful. :-)

Highhat | November 11, 2011 - 08:08

This really made me remember Tina- I love the way you seem to spark these memories of youth in some of your poems. It is so good. I do remember if the last bus had left we would just walk or like it is said here just wait at the station on a bench. Who cared? We had oddles of time and energy. We could conquer the world!
Loved it
;)Pia

Silver Spun Sand | November 11, 2011 - 12:33

Thanks, fb. Pleased you thought so;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | November 11, 2011 - 12:36

Pia, I always enjoy sharing your thoughts. Thank you, and I think you hit the nail on the head when you said of our youth, 'We could conquer the world'. It certainly felt that way;-) Pleased you enjoyed it so much.

Tina;-)

RachelPatricia | November 11, 2011 - 15:57

Ahhhh... another Silver Spun masterpiece, Tina, and very much enjoyed :)

Rachel xx