Depression by Written

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Fri, 2006-03-17 10:03

Moimo

Depression by Written

http://www.abctales.com/story/written/depression

This was a very personal piece that seemed to catch the mood of depression very well for me. Haunting.

Fri, 2006-03-17 10:31

poetjude

'Your cotton wool viscosity' I can't decide whether or not this line does it for me or not.

Fri, 2006-03-17 23:23

yan

nah!

There's nothing more mind-teasing than the incomprehensible eagerly avowed -
Dennett

Sat, 2006-03-18 17:53

Moimo

I dunno, maybe 'Your cotton wool viscosity', paints a picyure well, that sort of cloudy feeling in the head, you know it's stuck and won't go away. But what would I know, I'm not a poet. Actually saying that surely that would make me the better judge. After all if someone that doesn't aspire to poetry can get the picture then surely it's well painted. nobody

Sun, 2006-03-19 11:11

jem

I tried to go back and read it and all but the first line have disappeared... I had a quick read yesterday tho and def agree with you nobody. Although the poem isnt technically stunning, I think the mood is expressed really accurately and honestly... you get to feel the banality of it all . I don't think its whether youre a poet or not thats the issue here, but whether you can relate to depression - then its the sense of empathy that makes the words work. Just a thought...

Tue, 2006-03-21 13:33

Written

Thanks for your comments. Im glad i got the message across i dont really take technicalities into consideration in my poems but i am hoping that the more i write the more able i will be to make my poetry impacting in every way, including through poetic technicalities. The 'cotton wool viscosity' - is suppossed to represent that kind of inability to make a clear desicion about it and focus on the idea - its a kind of 'fuzziness' of mind. I hope it didnt depress anybody though!

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