RE: Opposites for Beginners

Topic posted in response to Opposites for Beginners : http://www.abctales.com/story/ewan/opposites-beginners

Lorraine
I liked this piece. It is the first I have read as a new member here.

I know nothing of poetry; however, as a piece of work I thought there might be a few redundancies:

The opening lines hooked me right in.

The second "verse" I think ? You could ditch the word "although" arguably not required.

You use the words "you'll and "you'd" I would suggest keeping to one....Don't know why.

"We choose our Christmas presents blindfold from Argos
Catalogue, but you use the
index and I don’t."

Consider dropping "Argos." copywright...
Consider dropping the word "but"

I liked the ending. I think it encapsulates all that went before it. It states, I think, that through all the little habits and quirks of nature of the spouse, that still there is love....Nice.

I havnt looked at what my suggestions do for your piece as a whole, but if they provide at least food for thought then I am pleased.

ChickenHawk