Writing A story...

Hi Michelle. Well, It's short so not much to get into and there are a lot of spelling errors, especially the ends of words are missing etc so firstly I'd suggest that you go back and check it over in the 'edit' facility. Saying that, technical details should never get in the way of a good story so as long as you keep it interesting and different then it will catch the imagination. You have to remember that you're recreating your imagination here and not just reporting on the facts or filling in a diary so take your time to think carefully about how you phrase things and describe what's in your mind so we readers can be there with you. You've got all the time in the world and the opportunity, with writing, to go back and change things if you see fit. I was intrigued by the fact that Michael was thought 'scary' by your co-workers and that there seems to be some controversy in his mind about you two being together. Get into the emotions of both of you as well as those who view from the outside and help us understand all the subtle feelings and thoughts of your characters but never forget you're telling a story so try and keep everything relevant. Keep it up ely.