pirates

By a.lesser.thing

Tue, 02 Apr 2013
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7 comments
 

Swarthy sailors sing: aye,
this is the life for me! I have
contracted scurvy and stepped
on a rusty nail, but all that
matters, dear captain, is that
we sail, sail, sail!

Meanwhile, an innocent one
lays below deck - doesn't show
his fray, but he's a nervous wreck!
Dreams of his summer love, a fair-haired girl
who's threatened to give
everyone's lives a whirl

Too bad he'll never see her 'gain,
for on his way up to his shift he'll
trip and break his neck! All these sailors,
foolish 'nough to think this a temporary trek.

The sea consumes, dooms;
you don't go into the water,
tell it to keep you afloat,
and leave without extending
the same gesture.

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Comments

Submitted by The Walrus on
I love pirate stories and poems, and I think we should have a World Pirates Day when it's compulsory to dress up in eye patches, spotty headscarves and wooden legs and do an awful lot of haa-haaring. I know your piece has a serious side too, and I don't mean to belittle it. Also, it's nice that you can also do pieces that have little or nothing to do with your personal problems.

Submitted by scratch on
I like this very much and especially this bit; " "but all that matters, dear captain, is that we sail, sail, sail!" Says a lot.

 

Submitted by a.lesser.thing on
@Walrus: Ahah, I love pirates too! They seem to pop into my head when I'm happy/in a pleasant mood--I love the theme of them, and writing about them has always been a joy (if I looked hard enough, I'm sure I could find a couple actual stories I wrote). No doubt that a worldwide pirates day would be fantastic! And no problem, I didn't feel like you were belittling the piece at all. :) I do write about things that don't deal with me personally a good deal, I just typically don't post them because I don't think they're as good a quality as my personal writing. That being said, I hope that in the upcoming months I can burst through that and develop a story or two! It's been all poems since I've been readjusting, and I'd like to work on a project a bit longer than these eventually. This got a bit off-topic, but all in all, I'm very glad that you enjoyed it and that you appreciate pirates as much as I! @Scratch: Ah, you caught that! :D I'm glad. I really liked writing this piece, because it came to me while I was laying down for bed and just seemed to click. While I was a bit in-character for writing this, I also wanted to convene some messages that are important, even if disguised. This piece wasn't about me/my problems, but still displayed an image that is vital to me now: just continue on, despite the costs (and/or pain). Really glad that you got the message out of that, and thank you so much! :)

 

Submitted by The Walrus on
Haar-ha-ha-haar, Jim lad! http://youtu.be/_EfW9znJYjw

Submitted by scratch on
Everything that you write is autobiographical, even the stuff that isn't.

 

Submitted by a.lesser.thing on
@Walrus: I just sat here, rewatching it a few times and laughing my butt off. That was, seriously, way too good. @Scratch: I read this while I was still at school, and it got caught in my head for the rest of the day. I kept flopping it over and agreeing with it. When I first read the sentence, it didn't make sense to me, but upon repeating it I soon got it (and agreed with it). It rings especially true with my poems, because most of them stem off of a mood/trail of thoughts (which, I supposed, every piece of writing is about--but the point I made is I tend to feed off of my energy more, rather than plot things out). And, from there, I also felt pretty good about myself when thinking about it. My writing leads back to me, is me; and I may not like myself all that much, but I do take pride of my writing. All in all, thank you for that sentence, because I feel as though you've added a whole new perspective to my viewings.

 

Submitted by scratch on
Your welcome mate. And you should be rightfully proud of what you're writing because it is of an excellent quality and standard. I can only imagine what it will be like with a few more years under your belt! I put you in the same bracket (standards-wise) as a couple of the very best on this sight, Mistaken-Magic and Sid. Sid just had a big clear out of her stuff but one poem remains called "Shall We". That one is so well worth reading. Anything by Mistaken-Magic. You will be pushing for a place on the podium alongside those two in a couple of years or I don't know nuthin'. Regards, scratch.