‘Dinner Date’ (in Tanka Style)

By Art of the Diver

Sun, 31 May 2015
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Tanka and Haiku are two poetry writing styles that are always fun to write given the objective of having to paint far more than a singular picture for the reader to interpret, within a fixed number of syllables and lines. This piece is written using an experimental approach rather than the traditional approach, I hope you enjoy your...

‘Dinner Date’

 

The caterpillar walk

Moving with intent

Determined to get her man

Before he ate the sweets

Oh, obese desires ~

 

*~ Pearldiver ~

 

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Certificate 12
Poem
Romance
Humour
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by london_calling79 on

This is cool. Love the fact that you are experimenting with form and structure. I liked this little vignette - great flexing of skills.

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Why Thank you kind Sir.. and yes I have to experiment very quickly because the busking is not too flash on rainy days... Have you noticed the change in how you observe fellow humans since you started writing? This piece illustrates how much writing has effected me... angry Though I feel I've become less sacastic,and more serpantine is my general manner... perhaps that comes from hours of busking in a turbin with a flute and a rubber snake? Cheers for that very positive comment my friend... you take care