‘Leave Me to My Denial’

By Art of the Diver

Sat, 30 May 2015
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This piece was inspired by the word 'Moving'

being this week's Inspirational Point.  Enjoy ~

 

 

‘Leave Me to My Denial’     

 

A foreboding sadness gathers

spreading mistily across my today

enveloping and staining

the fluidity of calm reason

 

It seems driven by determination

far stronger than my understanding

or my will to stop it, to not let it have

it’s more powerful way with my solo plans 

 

It has come to me defiantly upon

a howling yellowish-grey wind carrying gifts

of unwelcome anguish coated icy thoughts

the ghost of fate, and sticky pine pollen

 

Coldly my world is being transformed

completely clouded, unfamiliar to me

In boldness slain, it now seems

painted in hews disowned for their insipidness

 

Oh how this relentless determination shows the ease

of its ability to choke loneliness’ sepia freedom

Now at full gallop through every raw, gapping crack

found within the walls of what had once been possible  

 

And thus, the relevance of my denial lies expired

beside the door, no longer moving and evidentiary coated

in yellow pollen, chalking a fallen once proud soul

marking where a future forest, has now been spawned

 

Very well then take my fading, granular concession

I miss you too and perhaps, in time more vibrantly coloured

I will truly if not freely, realize how much along with how

to best remove the bloodstains of a denial’s demise

 

For I deeply abhor being so helplessly overwhelmed

incapable of avoiding the strident ways, you take my heart ~

 

                                                                                      *~ Pearldiver ~

 

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Comments

Submitted by VeraClark on

I love 'howling yellowish-grey wind' and that image of ghostly fate and sticky pollen. It's good to read an IP that uses emotion to 'move' rather than just the physical act of moving as you'd expect. A double whammy. Also read your lovely tribute to Nelson but it wouldn't allow me to comment.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Emotional and free flowing. 

'I miss you too and perhaps, in time more vibrantly coloured

I will truly if not freely, realize how much along with how 

to best remove the bloodstains of a denial’s demise

 

For I deeply abhor being so helplessly overwhelmed

incapable of avoiding the strident ways, you take my heart ~'

That's a great conclusion!

 

Bee

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Vera,

I do always appreciate you eyes over my shoulder as I trundle along on the journey of writing. Coming from a master in the art of emotional awareness in your characters, I feel honoured by your presence. I just hope my writing style is understood by my readers as we do express ourselves slightly differently downunder, having been relatively absent for years from direct involvement and learned understanding of other cultures and societies.

Re: Nelson, I think perhaps there is a bug in some of parts of the site platform, as I don't get email advice of comment posting either on a consistant basis. I found I couldn't post on one of yours either, the other day.

(UPDATE): I have also just noticed that even though Nelson was an IP piece, it states that it has not been read by staff, so I don't know what the particular problem with this piece is, but it may explain the difficulty you experienced.

Thank you anyway Vera, for those very supportive & sage lines you do manage to post... you take care up there

Rob

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Bee,

Thanks so much for your compliment, I'm pleased it read as intended. It's quite hard expressing the irony within co-dependant relationships as this piece actually relates to. War and peace, attention and attention seeking, as the parties exploit the high ground for their best advantage. Glad you enjoyed the read... take care