The Time Saver's Wife

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 21 Mar 2016
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His mother cooked breakfast 

every morning, packed lunch,

and had dinner ready

the second he got in from work.



But he needed space.

Wide open areas -

she got what she asked for -

A boy, a girl, two hamsters later, 

she couldn't take it -



or the kids - without his cash,

so she made his lunch -

just as his mum had -

packed her stuff.



And everybody said,

isn't he marvelous, bringing up

a family single handed? How could 

a mother leave like that? Answers

at the bottom of a bottle, please. 

Certificate 12
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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

this whole series is intruiging! Different clues in each piece. Not sure I can make them into a whole. Is there more?

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hidden problems, deep needs. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Sometimes it's like we're the hamsters, running around our wheels.  Lots of story in this this poem.

Submitted by maisie on

with all the different human stories in this one.  I've known mothers who ran away, and fathers who brought up their children alone (yet who attracted far more help than any single female parent does).

and those who run away from the hamsters, gerbils etc.  Nicely written and quite enjoyable.

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

An interesting perspective, Bee!

Well done!!

Terry