In The Dark

By Chessnut Eyes

Sat, 03 Mar 2018
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Welcome little child to your darkest fears inside

Come and join the fun, take a journey through the night

Close the closet doors or else the night consumes you more

Stealing every piece of innocence that never sees the light

Shut the windows and lock the doors, they always lie in wait

Wanting to rot your mind and corrupt you with all that you hate

You thought the safest place to be was right inside your room

But once the lights get all turned off your mind is surly doomed

Now your all alone and surrounded by the fears

Haunted by the past, whose voices send you straight to tears

How long will you last, through these memories of the past?

Waiting for your savior, the beautiful the light of day

Certificate 15
Poem
Horror
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

I like the mystery of this, the fact that the fears are never defined.  You're right, the scariest thing is not feeling safe where you should feel safest.

I've got just a couple of proof reading niggles, and if I've got it wrong, ignore me!  I was a bit puzzled by the line that ends 'in surly doomed', and wondered if you meant 'is surely doomed'?  Also, did you mean 'straight' instead of 'strait'?  I only raise it because the 'doomed' line in particular distracted me from the rhythm of the poem, and I lost the feel for what was going on.  

I love the picture on your profile page. I see one of your favourite movies is I Am Legend - have you read the book?  Really scary. 

Submitted by Nolan on

They tell me there is a difference between fear and anxiety, that fear is for something, a threat that does exist, and anxiety is only anticipation, a danger that doesn't. But how could you really know? As for the kid, often it would just be a bit of attention and love he wants! Nothing wrong with that.

Nolan &&