Every Other Weekend

Cherry

By Ed Crane

Sat, 30 Nov 2013
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10 comments
 

Closing the car door,

smiling back

at your milk-teeth grin.

A final longing look from eyes

unable to shed more tears:

and you are gone.

 

Arriving home:

a soundless house

to wash the dish half-full

of melted ice cream.

 

and pack away

My Little Ponies to prance

pink and purple prances

on another day.

 

Return to routine;

standard days;

standard times.

Empty fortnights

 

and the wait for a day

upon a year when you

are free to choose.

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Ed.

You have captured perfectly the emotions on both sides, the emptiness experienced between precious time spent on alternate weekends and the longing for things to equal out in the future. Many will empathize with the sentiments you have expressed so well. Very moving piece with a lovely flow to the words.

Bee

Submitted by london_calling79 on

'Soundless house' both a pleasing and a haunting description. Every image has that brown-grey tinge of tainted happiness. 

 

Submitted by Marionella on

Ed-

This is one of those extremely rare poems which exude simplicity and yet convey so much. So many images and meanings. I love this.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

This one really tugged at my heart strings, Ed. Beautiful writing.

Tina

 

Submitted by torscot on

With the others on this one, well deserved cherry.

Regards

torscot

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on

Really moving poem, I really liked the My little ponies & melted icecream - they painted a vivid picture. Well done!

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

Painful yet beautifully expressed in an understated style.

 

Submitted by scratch on

Love it Ed, sorry to be so late.

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Thank you everybody for your brilliant comments and Eds for the cherries.

My apologies for not replying sooner. I have been away from home (and computer wink) for a couple of weeks.

I really appreciate everybody's support.

EdC.

 

Submitted by Marionella on

Just came back to this again for no apparent reason and realized just how much I liked it so I thought I'd tell you again! :)

Sorry if that sounded a tad insane.