Knit we Together

By Ray Schaufeld

Sun, 06 Oct 2013
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DESPAIR     I'll never cope
I'll rip my electric blue dress
And tramp it down into
The rotting apples on the ground
And naked I shall weep.
 
HOPE           Wear your electric blue dress
That matches the beauty of
Your bonnie blue eyes.
Gather the rotting apples on the ground
And cleanse them with
The purity of your tears
Then nectar ye shall make.
 
DESPAIR       My pain o'erpowers my strength
And black and blue
My spirit screams unaided.
Hope - a fool's diet coke
A pound shop rip off
That lures me down the rotten lanes
Crawling like an infested maggot
Once more inside
The barbed wire nowhere grounds.
 
HOPE           Maggot you never are
But on God's green apples
Ye shall feast.
 
DESPAIR      Redress will never come
For harm that was dealt to me
When I had no defence
Yet through my inky black dense choking  fog
Shine lights of blue and green.
 
HOPE            Raise yourself from the ground
In readiness
To make the rotten whole.
 
DESPAIR AND HOPE
Knit we together
Ourselves
The rotting apples on the ground
The electric blue dress.
 
THE ENDsmiley
 
 
 
 
 
 

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Lost and found
Drama
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

A clever and interesting poem which uses the Inspiration Point in a variety of ways, in its entirety in the first two stanzas or broken down by its elements throughout the other verses as a basis for a dialogue between Hope and Despair and a final duet.

 

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Thanks for reading my poetic drama so carefully       Elsie

Submitted by Bee on

Interesting, Elsie -  I enjoyed thinking about this.

Bee

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Thanks for reading Bee. When I saw this as the IP my first response was 'I am not going to bother with this one'. Then I woke up early in the morning and saw my way forwardsmiley       Elsie