Depression

By PoeticalJustice

Fri, 10 Oct 2014
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Depression.

A compression of feelings, cementing you at the roots,

sprouting like poison ivy, spreading until darkness completely covers you.

A noose, a knife, anything sharp insight,

shimmers with light, like a fire exit sign,

a glimmer of hope enters your mind.

Fight or flight, right now you're ready to take off.

A permanent holiday, that isn't gonna cost much dosh!

Certificate 12
Poem
Feelings
Young Writers
Rant
Unclassified
Other Non-fiction
Nature
Opinion
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Collette. 

You describe those feelings well - the being weighed down, darkness and in the middle, all the threatening stuff. And then that 'glimmer of hope' where you change the perspective from 'you' to 'I' - not much to hope for after that holiday. I think it might work better if you kept it as 'you' throughout, but that's just my opinion, though. I recognise the feelings behind this piece, as will others, but thankfully, like you, I have always had my writing as an outlet. 

Good poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Bee x

Bee