After Making Love...

By Silver Spun Sand
Fri, 22 Jul 2011
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Raindrops on the skylight,
pit-pat, staccato overhead
as light from a candle
sculpts her silhouette
out of the darkness.
Smoke from the factory
hangs low against
a blackberry sky, shredded
by a watercolour moon
and I defy the dawn
to break this reverie,
as her breath falls soft
upon my cheek
like a blue butterfly...
jasmine winds
jostling the trees
transport my mind
to thoughts of where
she and I might go to –
music of the spheres
serenading our dreams...
A fanfare of fountains,
arpeggios of waterfalls –
wavelets, feathering
some Caribbean beach
where we two lie – lost
in the gegenschein,
watching a timpani
of stars, doing
the old, soft-shoe.
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Hello Tina, how do you come
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Tina,
how do you come up with all these wonderful poems?
you really are a winner and you amaze me, how they
always come over fresh, no two poems are ever the
same.
I read this one, it sent shivers through me, I don't
know why, but it's incredibly moving to me.
Thankyou for the read.
Oh! and 'Happy Anniversary' to you and your husband!
Jenny.
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Have to agree with all that
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Have to agree with all that Jenny has said - you have such a talent for sculpting the most beautiful imagery and sentiments, Tina, and this poem is yet another fine example of that :)
Hope you and your husband have a lovely weekend and many congratulations on your anniversary - he's a very lucky man, and I'm sure he knows it ;)
Another stunning read, thank you :)
Rachel xx
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What a romantic piece to
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
What a romantic piece to make a reader swoon! Again you've unleashed a wealth of unforgettable images: blackberry sky and her breath falls soft / upon my cheek / like a blue butterfly and so much more...*sigh* Enjoy your anniversary!
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I agree with the others -
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I agree with the others - some wonderful images in this poem. Happy anniversary Tina - I hope you enjoyed your day
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this is so atmospheric,
this is so atmospheric, right from 'Raindrops on the skylight, pit-pat' I just felt as if I was there. You're a wordsmith alright!
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I love it when you get so
I love it when you get so close to the core of human relationships Tina- you are so clever and unabashed
(took that word out of thin air ???is it right??)-bold-made my cheeks go rosey- well done on yet another beautiful descriptive poem
Hope you had a wonderful anniversary- congrats and have a likewise wonderful weekend- hope the sun shines on you and your husband.
atb
;)Pia
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