Only Cats Know When to Walk Away

There's a touching simplicity to your choice of words here. It brings impact and perpetuates the loss of normality sharply. 'Dapple-day' is lush.

'schooled me in draughts
and dominoes and dancing
on your brogues...'  That's my favorite. And I found the ending very moving - that need to remember - the sudden importance in getting it right. And you always do, Tina.

Hi again, Tina. Reading this again, I see that maybe the most important part is - 'for the moon to cool this savage breast all black and white to soothe the raw edge of a wound never heals...' Follwed by 'red.' Thinking about it, that's the part that changes everything. and that's what makes the ending so moving. 
 

The astute use of words in this poem bring thoughts to life.

Lines like:-

Wait, perhaps, for the night

and for the moon

to cool this savage breast...

bring calm to your poem.

Spoken from the heart Tina.

Jenny.

Silver Spun Sand

Tina

Great way with words Tina always.

Wait,perhaps for the night 

and for the moon

to cool this savage breast

Red I'sure it was

red,with yellow paisley,

and the cat-roustabout tabby

fading sepia,

thru grey

Superb writing words express and explode.

Luv cat?  photo particularly last verse in.

Sorry going in two spaces,can't alter yet.

cavalcader

feb 9th 2015

hello! Tina,thankyou so much such kind words. yes,missed you all,T.Cook Tony said he and all had.

But singing not much time,then fathoming all  changes,saw smiley faces,hearts went in wrong lines.

Press buttons,after Ray told me,BIU stands for,only days ago,Save! mean't not mine means send.

Have put all myself together,so don't make mistakes as have. Over the moon hear you, Tony,thousand thanks,last may over 'Jazz' was mess,wanted tell Tony privately all lead up too it. Also had little gift

2nd time take up1st gave away,got another then Ray let me down.got no address send of register,

it was when stepped down,not london then. Some one thrown flower pot over heavy,lift earth part out,Ray saw next  morning,last place 'Green Eyes' curled himself round,so take in over night. No gale. If can;t get something how work had it? Have look into author's poem story,choose bits,saying

right thing. Lovely night,Theatre Royal brighton,bus broken down hear waiting,left me five minutes get there,Sound of music sing-a-long same comedian when went 2010,look a like trouser set put sequins on coloured no Ray,up on stage,said mum died 2004 loved been on stage again me,as may

mentioned before? cavalcade as extra,mic handed each,omg applause all got,me loudest some got

chocolates,and gift,comedian went off,brought large wonderful book,sir Andrew Lloyd Webber,and all in sound of music,gobsmacked,nearly fell down steps shock.

All nuns dressed great,last night songs on screen sing heart out,bag things in,sprig Edelweis may spelt wrong,material,movements wave do,wore same,near door curtain open cold,haf move,didn't finish till 11am Ray come meet me for bus. Never see show twice,cheered me up got ticket ATG in

day.next 'Collabro' Friday 13th,Brighton centre,expensive,no Ray changed mind,so daughter come,

X factor march 17th on own finished Father xmas someone's little girl,don't know asked as went down there,time finishing,no have parcel up,give security guard,now joined email x factor november,

see all photos show live shows,can't get fan mail these,seeing. oh! why does mine change his mind annoying,but enjoy better,down on sea front walk darkish. Till up clock tower.Ray meet think.

Made me jump see Simon Cowell on screen,and Dave Walliams talk say thanks. Ray's of doing snooker teams cups as captain. Had late sleep after late night show! brilliant. When got 'These are a few of my favourite things,Whiskers on kittens,2nd time,tear there,as used sing it 'Jazz' on divan.

Keep warm have think well,if don't understand something,and train times,Ray normally do all didn't.

Must read more your exciting,intracate entwining work,over moon hear you,and blighters,T.cook Tony. take care

oh! smileys gone think heart xx

cavalcader julie