From a Stopping Train (Poetry Monthly)

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Thu, 02 Jul 2015
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A fleeting glimpse from a window...
in her small backyard, all wrapped up
in a winter-jasmine wind...
 
a sixty’s tenement block – two hundred eyes
pinkly shimmer back at mine....red-framed
behind her, like a painting by Degas
 
and she, by a tree, reaching for a branch
beyond her grasp, yet still, her arms 
stretch upwards to the sky, as if to float, 
if not to fly from Camden Town...
 
from railway lines, graffiti-riddled bridges
scowling down on tramps, like laundry, 
slumped in alleyways; Zimmer frames...
and things.
Certificate PG
Poem
Silver Spun Sand Poems
Spiritual
Philosophy

Comments

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

I love those fleeting glimpses of other lives from a train window, speed and stillness meet.  The Degas pose is a lovely image, as is the winter jasmine wind wrap, an elderly ballerina in contrast to hard metallic lines, has a touch of Chagall about it too.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Good morning, Philip, and thank you so much for your words...Chagall, indeed.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I liked the detailed glimpse of the one person, with the backdrop of the many lives flashing past. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Appreciated, Rhiannon.  Many thanks.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I'm just here to agree with the above comments. Wonderful description.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Glad you enjoyed, Bee, and many thanks for telling me.

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

You've captured thoughts of a time and place so well in this poem Tina. I loved that first stanza: Especially:

A back yard all dressed up in a winter-jasmine wind...

Beautifully done.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Jenny. Pleased you enjoyed, and told me so thoughtfully.

Tinasmiley

 

Submitted by love_writing on

We can see much in those fleeting flashing glimpses into others life's- you've captured that so vividly here with some fantastic descriptions. 

love_writing

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, lw.  Appreciated.

Tina

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I apologise for my tardy response to this poem, Tina, but I was busy trying to come up with something decent that I could offer for the Poetry Monthly.
Knowing my admiration for your poetic mastery you hardly need me to reiterate my sentiments but let me add to the accolade  for this little gem.

Lots of love, Luigi xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Luigi...it means a lot to me you took the trouble to let me know you enjoyed my little contribution to the new 'Poetry Monthly'.  Like yourself, I guess, I'm more than eager for any kind of inspiration as far as my writing is concerned, and so this is a great idea.  Pleased you liked, and I see you have been busy yourself coming up with your own wonderful poem which I have only just read.  Well done on the cherries; they were more than deservedsmiley

All best wishes to you, and I hope you are having a peaceful Sunday.

Much love, Tina xxxxx