EBOLOWA 5

By simonmiller15

Fri, 03 Jul 2015
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5

 

Certificate 18
Story
EBOLOWA
Historical Fiction
Crime

Comments

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Simon

You do a good job at conversational bits. They seem very natural.

And I was pleased that you got the flights and airlines from Chicago right. It was still BOAC those days, and flights went to London - we had to get an internal flight up to Manchester.

The story is slowly progressing. You do a lot of recap, which is good from my point of view, as I need to be refreshed on details, and the story is very complicated.

Yes, we watched the riots on TV during the presidential campaigns but we didn't live too far away from the action. "The whole world is watching," the people chanted, and it certainly was.

On to the next chapter. 

Jean

 

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