Ocean Of Dreams

By skinner_jennifer

Sat, 08 Oct 2011
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While you lay sleeping
in our bed of dreams,
I softly whispered
to that ancient moon,
sharing the secrets
that only we knew,

your Spiritual breathing
continues to comfort me,
like the motion of tide
the ebbing and flowing,

deep Ocean desires go on,
mystified I feel the water
cleanse my very soul...
so go deeper my love
dream away your dreams,

too soon we will kiss
dawns new rising day,
gathering of visions
just a fading memory,

So exhale early morning mist
as we await Sun's first kiss,
along shoreline hand in hand
you gave me the wedding band,
pearly skies reflect on Ocean
calm...as we walk arm in arm.

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is so very beautiful, Pia, and has put me in a wonderfully romantic mood;-) Oops just noticed;-) Says she, red-faced. Sorry, Pia and sorry Jenny. All the stanzas are lovely, but my favourite is the third. Much enjoyed. Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, Jenny here, thanks for the comment, glad I could put you in a romantic mood, thankyou for reading and letting me know. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
A slight mix-up Jenny-but I am very honoured Tina thought this was mine though I'd never be able to create such a beautiful poem as this. You have such a lovely serene rhythm to your poems Jenny- they flow so well and you use such wonderful images from nature. I enjoyed this one too. ;)Pia a couple of typos: 3. stanza- too soon and last stanza- await Sun's first kiss

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new skinner_jennifer Very well written. I like the last stanza. Made me smile an feel warm inside. Not the weather, is it, what one does with it. Have a good week-end. julie xx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, thanks for your help with the mistakes, it reads a lot better now. I'm really glad you enjoyed reading this poem, it was inspired by listening to Led Zepplin of all things, although has absolutely nothing to do with their music. Glad you enjoyed and thankyou for your comment. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there julie, it's definitely cooler than it has been and I suppose this poem is a bit more Summer than Autumn, but it was just inspired by music. That was nice that it made you smile and feel all warm, a very comforting thought. Thankyou for reading and letting me know. Hope you have a peaceful weekend, take care. Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Jenny :) I hope you are well :) Another lovely, brilliant piece!!! loved it and who cares about the mistakes lol.Because in a work of pure art, there is only perfection. Keep Writing Keep Smiling :) Trish xx

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Trish, I really do appreciate you reading this poem and for you kind comment. I'm glad you liked it and thankyou for telling me. Jenny.xx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, don't worry about the name mix up, it's easily done and I'm just glad you enjoyed reading it. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Lovely Jenny so peacful and calm- definately a music inspired writing :)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
You are a real treasure Kahdai, your reading and comments are truely appreciated. Thankyou so much. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
^^

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hello Jen nice this one. That's the best time to walk along a beach as the "...dawns new rising day..." and in the "...early morning mist..."
ScoZen

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thanks ScoZen, it must be wonderful living by the sea, to live so close to beable to experience the early morning mist. Thankyou so much for reading and letting me know your thoughts. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
foggy here by the river too!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Kahdai, I know what you mean about the fog yesterday, it took ages to lift, but when it finally did we had some wonderful sunshine not to hot to walk in, which is what I love about this time of the year. Hope you're having a good weekend. Jenny.