Prisoner
By skinner_jennifer
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Sallow skin ravaged by hunger
gripped by callous sinful hands,
raven approaches with dismal
reminder of this desolate waste,
escape blew me across this barren land;
where all that's heard is frantic hysteria
promising to melt this brain; till each stem
is sacrificed to this madness called insanity.
Oh! Hostile sand you abuse my sight,
grinding me down with gritty fragments;
anything would be better than these mundane,
frayed clouds drifting across a full lunar moon.
How I long for the jabber of jailbird gossip,
even fear cutting through turbulence of men,
those cursed – chilly bars of steal would be
welcome on such a howling – devilish night.
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Comments
Hi, Jenny, Is this depicting
Hi, Jenny, Is this depicting thoughts/dreams on being a prisoner of fears/guilt/insanity being far worse than being imprisoned in a physical prison? Rhiannon
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I thought that last part
I thought that last part really captured what you were going for, Jenny. Cold steel on a devilish night. Could feel it.
Rich x
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Builds an ominous and
Builds an ominous and claustrophobic mental landscape with stark imagery, lovely (in a dark way) diction, and effective use of alliteration and sound throughout. Strong work
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Hi Jenny
Hi Jenny
Yes you create quite an atmosphere in these few short lines.
Jean
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