Young and Heartless

By smvalera

Thu, 30 Jan 2014
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Quoting Lennon is all I find suiting for my request, "how can I go forward when I don't know which way I'm facing?". Within this post, I am asking that for you to read my two sentence hook and tell me if you would want to keep on reading. For some odd reason, I cannot bring myself to finishing even just the first page until I know that at least one person would want to read my first sentence. As aforementioned, I just wish to be pointed in the right direction. Also, I apologize for this informal format; I am very new to all of this if you cannot tell. I hope you enjoy, thanks again!

-S. Valera

 

Young and Heartless "Hook" 

I left my heart on that warm, July day. You did not want it, but I never took it back.  

 

 

Certificate 15
Story
Young Writers
Romance
Drama
Humour
Other Fiction
Love

Comments

Submitted by Baphomae on

Write, write, and write some more. laugh

Submitted by Cow Paddy on

I read this several times. I took a swig of beer and thought if I knew of any writer using vague topic tease approach. Maybe in , Sherwood Anderson's 'Winesburg, Ohio.' The strength of quickly giving character involvement to the vagueness in your sentence is how the audience with be able to feel the needed apathy 99.9% a tale needs.

Your sentence is like a fastner, but a fastner is how beauty is connected: So be it your writing.