Kool-Aid

By Villefort

Sun, 29 Nov 2020
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5 comments
 

They say not to drink it, not to mimic all the stories I've heard

But I am still not sure if the compulsion stems from the stereotypes

Or the depths of my own mind.

 

They act like it's unfathomable, like boundaries must be irreparably shattered

But in my experience the resistance is very little

Other than the natural resistance of the flesh.

 

They think it's artificial, aimed towards others rather than myself

But the sting is slightly sweet and tastes warm and salty

Obscured by long sleeves on sunny days.

 

The rivulets aren't enough to quench the bizzare thirst I feel

But they're thick

And vibrant

And grotesquely beautiful.

Certificate 15
Poem
Young Writers
Surreal
Rant
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

Hi Villefort, welcome to the site.

This speaks of a lot of internal conflict and danger, and I see it's marked 'autobiography', so I'm not going to speculate on the experiences that might have given rise to it.  As a poem it has a haunting and eerie quality, quite unsettling.  I think it is probably one that will stay in the mind.  I'm not a poet, so can't offer any feedback really on structure, but it's a great start here on ABC Tales and I very much look forward to seeing more of your work.

Submitted by Villefort on

I really appreciate the compliment! I'm not really a poet either, but I figured it wouldn't hurt to try my hand at something new.

 

Submitted by Leander42 on

Elephant in the room: Self harm.

I praise you for writing about it. My daughter has similar issues. It's hard for people to understand what it's all about. Poetry can help them. Keep writing.

 

 

Submitted by Villefort on

I totally forgot I made this site way back. Thanks for commenting on my work! I've been doing better over the past year, and even though I rarely write, when I do it tends to be processing my emotions and experiences as such. I'm glad this piece brought you a sense of solidarity!

 

Submitted by Villefort on

It's been a while since I've been on here and I've been doing much better over the course of the past year, slowly but surely. Thank you for looking at my writing! I'm glad it brought you a sense of solidarity. Best of luck to your daughter.