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Level Up

When you're at the top level of a game, what's next? Is it game over, or does it go on forever? For fans of Ready Player One
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Dead Again (Chapter One)

The first chapter of my new novel available now on Amazon. https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B07MJL4FRQ
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Dark Dark House

On the second landing, you can hear the Dark Dark in the walls. That’s why we can’t go outside, Mum says, because of the Dark Dark. They want to eat us
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Lightening Strikes Twice (I.P.)

It was the graveyard shift for Steve. He’d read once that they used to watch graveyards at night in case they’d buried someone alive, so the term still stuck centuries later. Imagine sitting in a deserted graveyard with a full moon rising over crooked gravestones covered in weeds with only the dead for company.
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Spare Parts

I've seen the vastness of space, watched countless worlds thrive with life as I orbited above. I've seen the birth and death of suns. I've watched the warp gates split the realities and travelled faster than light.
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14 of my comments have received 15 Great Feedback votes

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Loved the writing! I was so

Posted on Mon, 23 Dec 2013

Loved the writing! I was so captivated by it. Your descriptions were so crisp and the story itself, short as it is, was great. I see the narrator of the tale becoming the hermit at the shrine as the wars fight on. There were no dates or places...

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Use the top hat man againt:

Posted on Sun, 18 May 2014

Use the top hat man againt: fantastic creation of character. Loved him. Really dark and gruesome story, I'd read more about this. 

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Posted in Balance

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I liked how you built in some

Posted on Thu, 29 May 2014

I liked how you built in some background to the story, revealing more about Chris which I'm sure we'll learn more about. However, there's a couple of points here... It's half caste, however, it's generally considered an offensive term. Probably...

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It's a great setting and well

Posted on Wed, 28 May 2014

It's a great setting and well written, but at this point in the story I think we need a little something to start happening. I'm hoping in the next part. Isolation on a lonely island when night comes in could be really creepy and I hope you play...

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It's well written - though if

Posted on Thu, 15 May 2014

It's well written - though if I'm being picky I'd watch the commas in the first paragraph as it breaks the flow a little and first paragraphs are important. I'm not sure what genre this will turn out as and have no idea where it's going. The set...

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Posted in Ch1: Stolen May 14th part 1

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Finally got the time to get

Posted on Thu, 10 Apr 2014

Finally got the time to get back to this - sorry it's been a while. 

I think the only advice I can give here is maybe watch the dialogue. I find some isn't necessary, particularly when another character interjects.EG:

“Subdued?”...

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Interesting turn of plot -

Posted on Sun, 30 Mar 2014

Interesting turn of plot - there is a sense of something sinister building up here. I don't think it's going to turn out very nice! You're keeping the plot nice and snappy with a sense of doom about the entire piece. You could sharpen this a...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - Working Title - Part Two - 1103 words

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Good start Moya. For a longer

Posted on Sat, 29 Mar 2014

Good start Moya. For a longer piece I'd pace out the backstory as the action takes a little back seat. We  only need to know a disaster has caused people to flee the earth. It ends with the promise of adventure which is good. Watch for the...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - First Draft

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That was a great little piece

Posted on Thu, 06 Mar 2014

That was a great little piece. Structure and flow was good and if I might say, smooth. There's only one bit that seemed a little jarring and it's near the end where you mention France at the end of two sentences. It felt slightly repetitive but...

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Posted in Ghosts

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I really liked this. I found

Posted on Wed, 11 Dec 2013

I really liked this. I found it nostaglic and the descriptions were spot on. How I miss those Saturday nights waiting for Doctor Who. If there is one thing I could suggest, it would be to maybe cut down on the first main paragraph as it's a...

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