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| Type | Title | Author | Replies | Last updated |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Story | On The Edge | windrose | 2 | 8 years 1 day ago |
| Story | Conquest of Chimera | rayjones | 7 | 9 years 4 months ago |
| Story | Rubber soles – the shoes from hell | Truth42 | 11 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | What Cinderella Taught Me | imaniisfaith | 4 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | Your own kind | love_writing | 10 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | The Dying Man Parallel Universe Problem | well-wisher | 3 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | Jar Jar Binks | randy-johnson | 1 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | In the End | Ellie Grendon | 2 | 9 years 5 months ago |
| Story | “An Illegal Thought” | well-wisher | 1 | 9 years 5 months ago |
hi rayjones,
Posted on Mon, 01 Jun 2015
hi rayjones,
I enjoyed reading your story - more like fantasy than SF I'd say :) - so far....
You have a very good descriptive style - but I feel you need to be more succinct, and let the reader fill in the details - ie the crash...
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