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I have 1163 stories published in 7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 2275370 times and 1182 of my stories have been cherry picked.
1594 of my 15,228 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 1627 votes

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Cherry

the big check up

Heart - the proper place to start Too snug to be riled Liver- there’s the boy Loved fatty food and all things crude Kidneys - pissed away Indelible...
Cherry

Countdown

Countdown When Helen got the telephone call that her Da was dead she was curled up on one end of the couch watching Countdown, painting her toenails...

Waiting

Fog clouds and claws Cling-things of the flesh Earth a smoking pit Mountains made to fit Unmanable things as sea Albino plants Fallen lies of the...

strides

Is it fun being impossibly young? Am I too old to care What you wear? What I wear Without a care? T-shirts, chains, all a dazzle. Soulboys’ greasy...

In Closing

Years roll down your face – historic Hysterical Pack a paunch to your gut A hundred billion neurons die Now you know why Diet You what-the-fuck...
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1594 of my comments have received 1627 Great Feedback votes

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the afforntery of that Clare,

Posted on Mon, 04 Jan 2016

the afforntery of that Clare, watch out for the creak of the wardrobe and soon she'll no be there. I like this.

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Posted in The Wardrobe

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 Vietnamese with a waiting [t

Posted on Mon, 14 Dec 2015

 Vietnamese with a waiting [t]Taxi driver

 he [w]Winced.

characterisation and descriptive prose are great. 

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Posted in The March of the Dragons Chapter 2 (minus the last paragraph due to word count).

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the world is a friendlier

Posted on Wed, 30 Dec 2015

the world is a friendlier place when we smile. 

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Posted in Sometimes...

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in case they hurt themselves,

Posted on Sun, 20 Dec 2015

in case they hurt themselves, you see, I see clearly, but what can you do when there's only me and you? 

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Posted in Glass is a Supercooled Liquid

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good ending in a sickish sort

Posted on Wed, 25 Nov 2015

good ending in a sickish sort of way, sums the story up well. I can't say I've noticed anything like that in my local forays through the park, but I guess as it's always pissing down that helps dampen people's rogering forays. 

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Posted in the shared park

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I didn't think he was very

Posted on Sat, 21 Nov 2015

I didn't think he was very funny. I'll rephrase that, he wasn't funny, but I didn't think you got jailed for it. That worries me. I'm packing my cardigans into a bag now. Ready to flee to England where there's a lot of funny folk. Just another...

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Posted in Plot without a story

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the mastery of time seems to

Posted on Sat, 14 Nov 2015

the mastery of time seems to be your line. I guess Switzerland isn't much of a date, especially if you've left life too late, but what wonderful recall, it's a lesson to us all. 

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Posted in 'Hard-Boiled Wonderland and the End of the World'

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time spins and

Posted on Wed, 11 Nov 2015

time spins and circumnavigates and I guess we place our bet of whose to blame on the table, never thinking our number will come up. 

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Posted in oot ma heed.

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panic indeed. simple sentence

Posted on Tue, 10 Nov 2015

panic indeed. simple sentence are good, but look for a bit more variety. 

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Posted in Panic Room

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check on your Mum as a name

Posted on Mon, 02 Nov 2015

check on your Mum as a name and as a description (eg my mum). I'm not sure how jaggy stones catch elbows (too high up the body) in opening paragraph. That apart. The tone is just right. Possible story of the week. Gets my vote. 

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Posted in Fly like Superman

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