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I have 1174 stories published in 7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 2355592 times and 1197 of my stories have been cherry picked.
1622 of my 15,402 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 1655 votes

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Cherry

flockers 8

When Myra told me she went back with Charlie after he raped her I didn’t understand it, but in a way I did. She made a bed up for me on the settee...
Cherry

flockers 7

Myra’s studio flat had heating and hot water. I could have cuddled her. She ran a bath with all the suddy and splashy smelly stuff. She dipped her...
Cherry

truth grows teeth

Truth grows teeth Anger and shame came You leaving again Kin and king of what might be mine Bullied aside as obscene Luxury we can ill afford Mourn...
Cherry

flockers 6

Days passed in a shuttle of discomfort. My skin went to war with my body. Blisters appeared round the skin in my hands, soles of my feet and toes...
Cherry

flockers 5

Had a few days to think about how wronged I’d been by the court system. Off work. Phoned in sick cough, cough, with the flu that needed careful...

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1622 of my comments have received 1655 Great Feedback votes

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Geoff seemed like one of the

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

Geoff seemed like one of the good guys. Yet he get's done over as a bad guy. Great volte and twist at the end. Great story.

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Posted in Four doors down

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the rain, the clouds, the cry

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

the rain, the clouds, the cry of the children, a background noise dripping with melancholy. After the darkness there may be light, but the darkness remanis.

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Posted in After the flood

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hard to get [h]old of

Posted on Thu, 14 Aug 2014

hard to get [h]old of

interesting, but needs split up into paragraphs. bit of a blob the way it's set out and likely to stop people from reading more, which would be a pity.

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Posted in No Man's land

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Don't know why your shorten

Posted on Sun, 10 Aug 2014

Don't know why your shorten until to the more colloquial 'til in the last paragraph, a sudden colluquialism that doesn't quite gell.

Verm imaginative. I couldn't get grey man, but blue man, well, that set the tone.

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Posted in Shredding

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humble and sad, but never bad

Posted on Sat, 09 Aug 2014

humble and sad, but never bad.

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Posted in Mistakes

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I'm excited about what's

Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014

I'm excited about what's about to happen too.

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Posted in Out of Control-5

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psalms [palms of hands]

Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014

psalms [palms of hands]

type out a candlestick

don;t don't

plenty or rain today and I know how the narrator feels.

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Posted in A late summers day

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Fracking bomb is captialised

Posted on Wed, 30 Jul 2014

Fracking bomb is captialised and uncapitalised. I share many of your concerns.

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Posted in This life is a plastic wrap

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yeh, who can afford to live

Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014

yeh, who can afford to live in DC? But you'd need a better imagination to figure house prices in London. 'buy a guy' sounds like an offer and not a preposition.

Oh, the Fab Four, sounds like some obscure band.

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Posted in 17. Do You Believe In Magick?

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start chiselling now lavadis

Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014

start chiselling now lavadis

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Posted in Unbounders Away

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