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I have 1174 stories published in
7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 2356448 times
and 1197 of my stories have been cherry picked.
1623 of my 15,402 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 1656 votes
My stories
The big Malky
Frank took two days to hitchhike down to London. It was all new. A night sleeping in a plastic bin bag sheltering outside a Tube station, with what...
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snap
You didn’t need to be a fortune teller to work out what Granda was thinking. Eyes windows of the soul, but eyebrows garbed like two grey squirrel...
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Rambling
Rambled away – weather grey No road and mud suckled Muckle on Hold my coat aloft Breezed away into the day Hills that hug Jag-eyed vision of...
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a dowry
Memories inside the track Train filled with cinders Empty carriages Tossing and turning time The coal of life burning Firebox of hushed silences And...
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flockers 12
Went to see Myra the next day. Wasn’t sure if it was the right thing to do. Wasn’t sure she’d want to see me. Whenever I appeared things got worse...
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soaks up everything like a
Posted on Tue, 09 Dec 2014
soaks up everything like a sponge is cliched, Delete the sponge bit or use a butchery metaphor eg HIs brains soaks up things like a cow soaks up bovine spongifom encephalophy, which is more words, which defeats the purpose. Mad or what? I liked...
Read full commentPosted in When The Boxes Open
Johnny carried [H]hector.
Posted on Sun, 07 Dec 2014
Johnny carried [H]hector. good fast beat to the action, but referring to them as man 2 and man 3 makes it seem more like a screenplay than a story. You could use shorthand like the fat man and the thinner man etc.
Read full commentPosted in My Friend Johnny (chapter 2)
brilliant. You and I are
Posted on Thu, 04 Dec 2014
brilliant. You and I are earth indeed.
Read full commentPosted in You and I are Earth
K(C)rays. But don't kill the
Posted on Wed, 03 Dec 2014
K(C)rays. But don't kill the goose that laid the golden egg. Keep writing. Later you can move back and go horizontal, following the leads you've established here, giving a bit more detail. Fleshing them out!
Read full commentPosted in BERMONDSEY GIRLS - Rose Amelia Wigzell - Part 3 - Brothers in arms
oh, sad twist at the end. I'm
Posted on Fri, 28 Nov 2014
oh, sad twist at the end. I'm not able to judge whether it's the standard iambic pentameter, or whether Melvolio is a play on Malvolio Twelth Night, but your skill is remarkable. I wish you well with this.
Read full commentPosted in A Star Crossed Story
good story, flows well, ends
Posted on Fri, 28 Nov 2014
good story, flows well, ends well -well for some!
Read full commentPosted in Kevin Smiled
well written, I was wondering
Posted on Thu, 27 Nov 2014
well written, I was wondering how she could have an organism when dead (which is a physiological impossibility) then she came 'alive' again in the bathtub. Interesting.
Read full commentPosted in The (Nec)Romancer Part 1
yep. gritty and groan filled
Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014
yep. gritty and groan filled and full of dis-ease, but truth often hurts.
Read full commentPosted in not quite AA, but only 12 steps to the bar
nice and slow piece here we
Posted on Mon, 10 Nov 2014
nice and slow piece here we go.
Read full commentPosted in California sunshine and motorcycles
cheers scratch, just playing
Posted on Fri, 07 Nov 2014
cheers scratch, just playing with words. Thanks Shannan, I wish I knew what it meant too. Often (more often than I'd like to admit) I've not got a clue whant a poem is and more often than that what it all means. I'm pretty good at deciphering...
Read full commentPosted in raring
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