derekpayton512
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I have 13 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 9820 times
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Derek Payton
I am a young writer looking for constructive criticism! Please comment and let me know what you think, I'm really here for opinions and advice. If you are experienced with grammar and sentence structure, and would like to give some advice in those fields, please comment! If you see recurring errors in any of my pieces, please feel free to comment! :D
My stories
Byrd Jones, Teacher and Grandfather
This story is equal parts autobiography and opinion. WIth this story I tried to share a piece of myself, with the hope of providing a perspective that you may not have felt before. Please keep an open mind.
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Open the Skies
A song inspired by "Remember Everything" - Five Finger Death Punch
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- 378 reads
Phoenix Rising
I tried to create and stick to a very specific structure. If you can see the pattern, I served my purpose.
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- 501 reads
My Crucifixion
I took great care to craft a series of couplets, all in the same rhyme. Each line contains 8 syllables. I was going to make the poem 8 lines, but I felt the last two lines were necessary.
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I like to wish for more.
A simple poem, a window into my life.
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- 472 reads